Thread:Claws Bane/@comment-1657133-20120617224712/@comment-2000765-20120618183650

I'm not certain if you're quite ready to be an admin just yet; I've looked over a couple of the episode articles you've added to, specfically the plot summaries, and I'm not impressed. ARC Troopers looked alright, but others such as Supply Lines were very poorly written. For example:

"On Toydaria, three medical ships were being loaded. Organa told the clones to hurry with loading the supplies. Within a few minutes, Organa told Jar Jar the fleet was ready to go. Jar Jar climbed on the table and said he would do an Gungan honor honoring the Trade Federation. He took everyone's plate and cups and starte juggling them as all three ships slipped past, without Dod detecting them. The mission was a success. General Di told the troopers they had to buy as much time for the Twi'leks as possible. Di aimed his ligthsaber at the droid army and shouted, "For the Republic! For the Twi'leks!" The clones started firing but were being shot down one by one. One droid threw a detonator that sent Keeli back. Pretty soon, Di was by himself...."

Nearly all of it was just stating the dialogue with broad descriptions of the actual situation. This is not what should be in the plot summaries. They should be describing the overall events without getting into too much detail. In my opinion, you have a ways to go yet.